Once upon a time in a green planet with a green houses, green people, green flowers, lived a little called Zoe. Zoe had a very big and beautiful family, her mother, her brothers and her cat Marshal. It was a very happy planet but one day arrived a red family to the green world. The red girld was called Maho, she lived with her mom and her dad. Zoe and Maho went to the same school and became firends quicly. One day in the school a boy was bothering maho and he said -You never see a green fish? -You never see a red fish? last Maho.
Zoe and Maho ran to the park. Maho was surprised because the trees are green, the flowers and the cat too!
Maho was very sad because she came back to the red planet. But Maho said -I can give you my red bear. Zoe and Maho said goodbye. Last nigth Zoe dreamed to travel to the red planet.
Good work! The story is a bit short and with some mistakes, but it is easy to follow and to understand
ReplyDeleteNext time, you can try something a bit more demanding